Faith Echols 

Project 1: Peer Review This is the peer report for project 1

COLLAPSE

• I appreciate your knowledge of how the poem is characterized and it's elements in the first paragraph, it let's the reader feel like you understand poetry and the poem itself. However I would put your last sentence of the first paragraph as your second sentence to help give us an idea of what you'll be discussing in the body.
• Your thesis statement is clear that it's about death, and how it's a plea for fighting death out of love for his father.  I would put a personal opinion in the beginning to help understand your standpoint or a connection to how you perceive his emotion.
• Besides bringing up the form of the poem, I feel like to help you, you could bring up how he reiterates rage, or some element used in the poem to give the reader emotion.
• Your specific quotes used really helped me understand the essence of the poem with those lines.
• The sources and works cited page is set up nicely. 
• Your essay is written in MLA format. 
• I like how you organized your essay, I would maybe make the body/ paragraphs stand out a little more from the quotes.
• Paragraph 2:  I appreciate you getting across what the author means, I would maybe go into a little more detail.
• Paragraph 5: You understood what exactly was being said, to help you conclude you could give your opinion overall, or reiterate your thesis.
• Reference page: I feel as though you did a really good job at resourcing other references to help you with your essay. It flows really well, and is in MLA format.
• My favorite part of your essay is how well you understood your poem, so much so I felt as though I had already read it or understood the quotes without any other backstory besides your essay.